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In modern society, the number of students who want to study in an English-speaking country has been increased rapidly. Regarding this, there have been controversies on whether students will have more advantage or disadvantage. Some people argue that they have another opportunity to study English fluently while others disagree with this statement, it is one of the transient trends, and it is rather than studying in the native country. I contend that the study in abroad has lots of advantages for learning another language.